original:.
mary had a little lamb.
whose fleece was white as snow,.
ORIGINAL:
You whisper in my ear that never will you leave me.
But you died -- you died! -- at such a time that I
Could not stand alone, nor take a step, unless
First you gave a shoulder 'pon which to cry.
Then, then I should take that lonely road
Less traveled . . .
EDIT:
You promised never to leave me.
Your death leaves me all alone.
I'm on my own now, helpless.
I need support to stand, to
Walk the lonely road that
Twists and turns ahead.
You lied to me . . .
original:.
mary had a little lamb.
whose fleece was white as snow,.
Greetings, Magnum:
Have you ever landed four-footed, with questioning brain and feeling heart at odds, on the question of the ages. Beauty is in the eye (and ear) of the beholder?
Much ink has been spilled on what you have pondered, as well as many an oral discussion over what works and what doesn't. Working the fine arts since earliest childhood, I have my thoughts -- shared by others -- yet there is no concrete way to delineate between objective and subjective evaluation. I believe that it is a rare, precise combination of brilliant technique and heart- and sense-touching emotion that will hold onlookers in their thrall.
I love your analysis of my edit. You saw economy and barrenness, yet stopped to reconsider . . . there might be beauty in what initially seems devoid of life. Well put! You have given my little edit more credit than I.
More to follow. I, now, am favoring the notion that less is more in my own verse.
Gratefully,
CoCo
original:.
mary had a little lamb.
whose fleece was white as snow,.
Thanks, cofty! I'm OK, and hoping the same for you.
Any attempt at poetry is fine with me. I'm paring down the words in my own.
Best.
CoCo
original:.
mary had a little lamb.
whose fleece was white as snow,.
Original:
Mary had a little lamb
whose fleece was white as snow,
and everywhere that Mary went
the lamb was sure to go.
Edit:
Mary travels; her ultra-
white sheep tags along.
"glenn close stepped on the stage to honor the academy members who sadly passed away this evening.".
.. what did the reporter mean to say?
coco.
Good ones, Oubliette, Bobcat and GrreatTeacher!
Thanks.
CC
What's that lying in the road ahead?
What are we having for dinner Mother?
has anyone heard from/about coco lately?
i wonder how he is doing, hope he is recovering well from his heart attack.
Thanks, again, my good friends, for thinking of me and wishing me well!
Love and best wishes to all of you.
CoCo
"glenn close stepped on the stage to honor the academy members who sadly passed away this evening.".
.. what did the reporter mean to say?
coco.
has anyone heard from/about coco lately?
i wonder how he is doing, hope he is recovering well from his heart attack.
Thanks, my dear friends, for your concern!
I'm all right, but wishing recovery were faster. My heart was damaged, so it's taking time. Not that I'm complaining!
Love to you and yours.
CoCo
jd souther ... is most widely known for his part in writing somber, elegiac songs that the eagles and linda ronstadt made famous, such as "new kid in town," heartache tonight," and "faithless love.
" the new yorker, february 13 & 20, 2012, troubadour, page 36.. .
"i've never made a record in new york, start to finish," he went on.
Verbs in English can be in the indicative, imperative, or subjunctive mood. We use the indicative mood when we state a fact, opinion, or question; most sentences will be in the indicative mood. We use the imperative mood for commands and the subjunctive mood when explicitly referring to an unreal or hypothetical situation or when expressing doubt.
jd souther ... is most widely known for his part in writing somber, elegiac songs that the eagles and linda ronstadt made famous, such as "new kid in town," heartache tonight," and "faithless love.
" the new yorker, february 13 & 20, 2012, troubadour, page 36.. .
"i've never made a record in new york, start to finish," he went on.
Thanks, GrreatTeacher and Hairtrigger, for your replies.
http://www.grammar-monster.com/glossary/subjunctive_mood.htm
Hope the above information helps, GT. The subjunctive -- expressing desire, uncertainty, importance, etc. -- is less employed today, certainly in conversation. Re: the hypothetical scenarios you referred to, I will look further. Did you read specifically about hypothetical situations and non-use of that verb form? Use of the subjunctive indicates what may be contrary to fact [hypothetical?], nevertheless, wished for by the protagonist. I insist that you not worry!!!
You're quite a match for Nancy, HT!
Thanks again.
CC
